I have added sections into my writing that make it seem more like an order of service, and actually, i really like this change. However, this has now meant that my zine will definitely need to be seen portrait as this is the way they always look. Another thing with this is that they are never bound. Ultimately, there are only two pieces making up their booklets. However, with mine, i have around 20 sheets of paper, and i just don't feel that slotting it all together will work?! ..But i am enjoying this new format to my zine and writings.
My version:
"Remain standing and cover ears
And the bell rings loudly even though it is a normal day. Her dad needs to do some work in the church and she joins him for the journey. And there is a drain that travels around the church and it is fun to walk in and follow it around. It fills with leave in the autumn but has moss in it at the minute and hidden pincones. Her dad collects pinecones and puts them in the van.
Look for pinecones for her dad
A few are surveyed by her and collected. She keeps walking around and her dad is sat on a bench talking to an old woman. Her brown clothes drown her. She has a scalf round her head to keep her ears warm. They are laughing. She recognizes her.
Together: Good afternoon
The lady’s face is wrinkly, and in those wrinkles are dirt. And soil under her nails. Like mine. But she has pink lipstick on. Her nan doesn’t wear lipstick like this lady. She doesn’t know why Miss Phipps wears lipstick. It gets on her teeth. Her Dad told me she has a well down her garden and this is where she gets her water from to drink and wash. She doesn’t smell.
My version:
"Remain standing and cover ears
And the bell rings loudly even though it is a normal day. Her dad needs to do some work in the church and she joins him for the journey. And there is a drain that travels around the church and it is fun to walk in and follow it around. It fills with leave in the autumn but has moss in it at the minute and hidden pincones. Her dad collects pinecones and puts them in the van.
Look for pinecones for her dad
A few are surveyed by her and collected. She keeps walking around and her dad is sat on a bench talking to an old woman. Her brown clothes drown her. She has a scalf round her head to keep her ears warm. They are laughing. She recognizes her.
Together: Good afternoon
The lady’s face is wrinkly, and in those wrinkles are dirt. And soil under her nails. Like mine. But she has pink lipstick on. Her nan doesn’t wear lipstick like this lady. She doesn’t know why Miss Phipps wears lipstick. It gets on her teeth. Her Dad told me she has a well down her garden and this is where she gets her water from to drink and wash. She doesn’t smell.